Monday, September 26, 2011

Write a better dialouge

Part from my script 


BILL
Why do you keep throwing the balls at me!
  ALAN
Shut up you “bionic woman”!
BILL
That’s why you keep throwing balls at me?
ALAN
No because your a nerd too! 
BILL
Your mean!
Alan throws a ball at Bill and hits him in the face. He brakes Bills glasses and falls to the ground. Alan is laughing.
ALAN
  Hahahahahaha!
 Sam and Neal run up to Bill and tries helping Bill get up.
SAM&NEAL
  Are you okay Bill?
Bill sits up with squinting eyes.
BILL
  (moaning) Euuuh, yes but why is everything-
so blurry? 
I changed everything to make it sound like the characters.

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