Brainstomers # 27

1. The location I chose was the cemetery. So then the day goes by, school ends and Thatcher goes home and finds out his aunt died. They plan the whole funeral and they show up and he finds Linda there. He goes up to her and asks her what she is doing there and she says that it was her moms friend. He was shocked and start a conversation on how she feels sorry for his loss, etc. but they a have a good conversation and he asks her for her homework so he can copy it. She was nice enough to let him copy her homework because she understood his problem. At first she was a bit mean, but she thought that she would want the same if she was in his position.

2. I am sitting in my classroom. This skit would be about students in a class room, and then all of a sudden an earthquake happens.

3. My filme location would be in a teenage girls room. The main conflict would be how the teenage girl get cyberbullied online. The characters are unique because they become somebody you would never imagined.

Pilot #8

I thought the story idea was good and different. There were a few mistakes with the format and how some ended up on the right side. Certain characters came out of no where and the repeated some sentences in the beginning.

Pilot #6

I thought the story concept was good except everything happened so fast. People were coming out of no where, all of a sudden. The way it was written was different on each page. Different fonts and sizes. But overall it was good.

Groundhog Day

The non-linear structure was used a the same day repeating itself over and over again. The only change would be what happens during the day. It is sort the same concept with "Run Lola Run" because it has different endings and different stories. This one is different from the rest because it every time at 6 a.m. the same song goes of on the alarm, and from their he can change how the day turns out. I think the only reason everything went back to normal is because he learned how to care/love others.

Pilot #4

I thought the main idea/conflict was good. The conversations he has with his friends, (the way he speaks) is way different from what we usally see. The whole story made me want to know more and find out what  happens. I like it.

Pilot #3

I thought it was an interesting topic. It's not a surprize of them story, it's been seen a lot but it can still be unique. It was very well written, just it had to much cussing.

Pilot #2

This script didn't really catch my attention. It was the usual story in every show, like drama. The only interesting part when they went to the part and John asked most of the girls to the dance.

Pilot #1

I thought, the overall story was good. Not a lot happens during this script. I would change the punctuations,  spelling and have more conversation with the class/teacher. I thought the most interesting part was the chat part.

Psycho Reflection

I can learn how creative and different you can be with the characters and the ideas. The creative part about the story structure is the lady dies way before the movie ends. The characters are unique because it is not what you expect from them, they all of a sudden change, like the killer. The writer uses symbolism by emphezing the birds, like when he eats and acts. The humor I didn't really detect.

Pilot Critique #2

It would be better if there was more of a conversation with Chole & Jordan, but overall it was good.

Pilot Critique

I thought the whole concept/idea was very good, but there needs to be a bit more of a conversation with the mother. Overall, it's good.